The graph below gives information on the numbers of particpants for a different activiities at one social centre in melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph presents information about the
numbers
of people who participated in various activities at Fix the agreement mistake
number
a
social centre events in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, there was an upward trend in the number
of participants
in the
table tennis, and a downward trend in Correct article usage
apply
amature
dramatics. Correct your spelling
amateur
However
, the number
of participants
for
Change preposition
in
film
club experienced fluctuation throughout the period.
In 2000, the Correct article usage
the film
number
of participants
for
Change preposition
in
film
club started at about 63, the Correct article usage
the film
number
show
some fluctuation between 2005 and 2010, Wrong verb form
showed
in
2015 the Correct word choice
and in
number
of participants
rose to about 65. Similarly
, the number
of participants
for
Change preposition
in
martial
Correct article usage
the martial
act
started at about 36 in 2000, there was a steady drop in 2005 to about 31 Fix the agreement mistake
acts
participants
and the number
rose to 38 participants
in 2010, between 2015 and 2020 the number
fluctauted
reaching a point of 35 Correct your spelling
fluctuated
participant
.
In 2000, Change to a plural noun
participants
table
tennis Correct article usage
the table
number
started Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
of
at about 15 Change preposition
apply
participants
, the number
experienced a steady rise throughout the years, reaching a
highest Change the article
the
number
of about 52 participant
in 2020. Change to a plural noun
participants
While
, the number
of amateur dramatics had a downward experience, starting at about 25 participants
, the number
rose in 2005 to about 26 participants
, in the next 15 years the number
drop
dramatically, reaching Wrong verb form
dropped
it
lowest point at about 5 Change the pronoun
its
participants
. In addition
, musical performances started in 2005 with no participant
, in the following year, the Fix the agreement mistake
participants
number
rose steadily reach
a point of about 15 Add the particle
to reach
participants
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