The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.
this
pie charts
depictsChange the determiner
chart
the
leisure time and what is the activities until 10 Correct article usage
apply
year
in USA from the 1999 to 2009. It is clear from the graph that Change to a plural noun
years
had
a lot of Verb problem
there was
channged
and Correct your spelling
change
develpoment
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development
with
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in
activites
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activities
For example
, the
swimming sport had in Correct article usage
apply
a
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increase
.
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increased
According to
what is shown Top iteam
from the per cent it is soccer Correct your spelling
item
team
it
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
due to
several reasons. Firstly
, in the past at 1999 was sccoer
the most Correct word choice
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element
before because it Correct word choice
important element
is help
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helps
to
our health and better choice for muscles. Change preposition
apply
secondly
it is Add a comma
secondly,
benefit
for our bodies and people Replace the word
beneficial
overall
love it. While
the walking had in
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apply
a
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an
increase
because they before did not have a car. In Replace the word
increased
addtion
, the walk makes Correct your spelling
addition
bloode
active.
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blood
To sum up
, we could say that we most benefit with
our leisure time we should Change preposition
from
did
not lose it Unnecessary verb
apply
with
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to
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