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You lost an item while traveling on a bus. An employee of the bus company assisted you in recovering your lost item. Write a letter to the company manager to thank the employee. In your letter describe what you lost and why it was important to you how the employee helped you find it and explain how you felt after recovering it.

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Respected Manager, I am writing to share
a
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an
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 incident that
happend
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happened
with
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to
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 me.
Actually
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 I was going to Richmond
in
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on
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 bus 301.
In which
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Which
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 I lost my wallet
that
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which
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containes
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contains
contained
 all the
singnificant
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significant
 identity cards and other bank cards. As soon as I reached my work, I found out that I lost my wallet somewhere. I tried different ways to find it but I was unsuccessful. After the whole day of
struggle
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 I got my wallet very next day because of the
driver
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 of the bus.
Accordimg
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According
 to
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driver
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the driver
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, when he found it
in
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on
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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and
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apply
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tried to look
in
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at
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 it
if
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apply
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he
can
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 get some information about the owner. As there was
contact
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a contact
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 card
of
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for
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 me, he gave it to the "lost and found" unit, they contacted me and I got it back. I felt so happy and grateful because I did not
expected
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expect
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 the
driver
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 will help me his best.
As my
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 friends
also
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 lost some items in
busses
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buses
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 but never got
it
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them
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 back so I was not sure if I would be able to get
it
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them
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 back or not. But the honesty and kind behaviour of the
driver
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 won my heart.
The
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last
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 but not least I want to thank the employee and
company
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the company
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 for their help. Regards Simran

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completeness
Make sure to proofread your letter for any small spelling errors, such as 'singnificant' and 'accordimg.'
task response
Adding more specific details about the item's importance could create a more compelling story. For instance, mentioning specific cards or sentimental value could enhance the depth of your response.
organization
The structure of the letter is logical, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.
task achievement
You clearly expressed gratitude and explained the situation well.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable, polite, and respectful.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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