The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
deaths
caused by terrorism between 2011 and 2015 in three Middle East countries i.e., Afghanistan, Iraq and Nigeria
.
Overall
, Iraq and Nigeria
recorded the most number of deaths
. In Afghanistan the total deaths
accounted for less than 6,000 throughout the years, meanwhile
the death toll in Add a comma
meanwhile,
Nigeria
fell around
5,000 by the end of 2015.
In the initial year of 2011, all three countries lost the same number (around 3,000 Change preposition
to around
deaths
) of people due to
terrorist attacks. Moreover
, it can be seen that the terror attacks in Iraq rose rapidly in comparison to the other two countries, this
trend increased by 1,000 deaths
per year till 2014 with total
Correct article usage
a total
deaths
of around 9,000 population and by the year 2015, the deaths
due to
terrorist attacks decreased by around 7,000.
Nigeria
recorded the second highest deaths
among the general population in the span of 2012-2014. The numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
deaths
significantly arise
after 2013, marking Verb problem
increased
around
more than 7,000 Change preposition
apply
deaths
till 2014. The citizens of Afghanistan encountered a
less Correct article usage
apply
death
until 2013, Fix the agreement mistake
deaths
however
the Add a comma
however,
death
increased by Fix the agreement mistake
number of deaths
few
Correct article usage
a few
thousands
, by the end of 2015, Change to singular
thousand
as a result
of wide spread
terrorism, more than 5,000 Correct your spelling
widespread
peoples
lost their lives.Fix the agreement mistake
people
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