disadvantages and advantages of universal healthcare.[772]

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Money has always been a controversial topic when it comes to every aspect of life, and
healthcare
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is not excluded.
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some
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believe that medical bills should be
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the government’s responsibility
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of individuals,
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others think that
people
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should pay the
costs
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themselves. From my perspective, I am more convinced of the latter opinion. In what follows, both views will be discussed and I will give relevant evidence to substantiate my stance. On the one hand, it is argued by some that
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should be free for everyone. Admittedly,
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statement is valid to
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extent. In fact, everyone has the right to get access to available
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innovations.
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, considering the significant
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in many developed countries
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as The US or Canada, poor
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have difficulty gaining proper treatment.
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, the idea of free medical services seems to provide humans, especially underprivileged ones, with more opportunities to overcome their illnesses.
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, medical bankruptcy could be prevented if a universal
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policy is established. What I mean is that many individuals have to file for bankruptcy since they
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afford the medical debt.
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, they hope that
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free
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could rule out, or at least minimize the considerable
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of medical treatment.
On the other hand
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, I myself believe that universal
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causes more problems rather than helps solve the existing ones. First of all, free medical treatment would raise
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for the federal government and, in turn, taxpayers. To illustrate, the government’s budget is limited and it could not cover all expenses from medical care.
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, the authorities would have to establish new financing mechanisms
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as introducing new taxes or issuing debt to maintain their budget, which unfortunately have no difference from paying medical
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at all.
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, free
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may create inaquedacy to meet increased demand from patients. In fact, when
people
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have to pay for their medicine, the demand is controlled which guarantees the supply of doctors and equipment.
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, a single-payer system would result in an unprecedented disparity between demand and supply, resulting in
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the risk
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of bribery or corruption as well. In conclusion,
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universal medicine might have certain positive impacts on humankind, it still lacks the ability to overshadow the problems it may cause.
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it sounds ideal when
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do not have to pay for their treatments, I think practicality should be taken into consideration first.
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