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The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the comparison of changes in the library before and after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The presented map presents the layout of the
proposal
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 construction of the reading room in the next 5 years. From an
overall
 perspective, it can be seen that
although
 the shape of the locations remained unchanged in rectangles,
but
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there will be some enhancement
on
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 the books' genres
various
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, the size, and the location of
its
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 features. Examining the first map,
in
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 the upper sides, there is a fiction
types
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 of books followed by history and
self help
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 book
shelf
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 in the west area. In the middle, there are eight square-shaped tables for the reading place and next to the right
sides
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, some newspapers and periodicals are available. Moving on to the advancement planned, in the next periods, there will be only four tables in the centre but with more length.
Moreover
, there is no
change
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 for the entrance and Librarian's desk, but in the right corner, the stairs will be higher than
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initial
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. Two computers
also
 will be added in the southeast spots and the previous storage of the news and periodicals will be replaced
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the
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film
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films
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 and DVDs. The north zone will be allocated for
the
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children's
book
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books
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,
whereas
 the fiction genre construed to the
west
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 areas nearly the new genres,
such
 as kitchen, economics, and law.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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