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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided chart illustrates the amount of
points
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 teams A, B and C scored during four seasons.
Overall
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, throughout all seasons
team
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 B won the highest scores and absolutely dominated the game.
However
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, the amount of
points
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 scored decreased over the years.
Team
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 A's score fluctuated but experienced a slight rise from 2002 and 2005.
Team
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 C showed a worse performance over the time period. Every year
team
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 B achieved the highest score amongst other teams with a high of 82
points
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 in 2002. From 2002 to 2004 the results suffered a gradual downfall of 19
points
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.
However
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, the
team
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 showed a better performance in 2005 with a total of 55
points
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 won.
Team
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 A's results were pretty consistent during the four seasons except 2004 when the amount of
points
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 scored skyrocketed. Unfortunately, from 2004 to 2005 the results experienced a huge downfall from 35 to only 8
points
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 earned.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words points, team with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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