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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below displays the
amount
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number
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 of American
households
 by their yearly
income
 in 2007,2011 and 2015.
It is clear that
 there was the largest total number of
households
 in the USA in 2015, and there was a general rise in
family
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families
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 from 2007 to 2015 as well. It is more evident that the smallest annual
income
 of
households
 in the US was allocated to 75000 to 99999
dollar
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dollars
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.
According to
 the increasing number of
households
, there were slight fluctuations between
four
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the four
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 sectors, especially the
income
 of more than 100000
dollar
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dollars
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. The figure of excelling 100000
dollar
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dollars
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 generally decreased in 2011, from nearly 29
millions
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million
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 to 26
millions
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million
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.
However
, it increased dramatically in 2015, reaching about 33
millions
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million
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.
By contrast
, the sector of 75000 to 99999
dollar
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dollars
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 not only has the smallest number during
five
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the five
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 categories
,
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 but
also
 has a slight fluctuation between 14 and 15
millions
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million
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. From a general view, the annual
income
 of 75000 to 99999
dollar
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dollars
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 measures roughly half of the figure which is more than 100000
dollar
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dollars
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. What’s more, the sector of 50000 to 74999
dollar
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dollars
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 always kept a stable level, at approximately 21
millions
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million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, income, dollar, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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