You and a friend recently went on a holiday together. There is a problem with the photos you have taken during the holiday. Write a letter to your friend to ask for a particular shot. In your letter •tell him/her about the problem with your photos •say which photo you would like him/her to send you •explain why you need this photo

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Dear Amisha, I hope you are doing well, I am writing to ask if you can share some good

shots

of me doing bungee jumping and parasailing by email. You know I bought the Canon camera just before our trip to Kelowna so that we could capture some photogenic

shots

while

doing adventurous activities. Unfortunately, these particular

shots

got deleted from my drive

due to

some storage issues and I was completely shattered to see that. One possibility to get these moments back is if you can email me some good pictures of jumping me from the cliff with your iPhone 15.

Also

, I want you to send me the picture of that particular shot where I was full of excitement to fly freely in the air for the first time. These highlighted moments are very special for me and I wanted to share some of these

shots

with my family and friends. On top of that, these activities have been on my wish list for a very long time and have been done which is the best feeling in the world. Thank you in advance for sending these pictures. Lots of love, Saniya

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coherence cohesion

To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea more clearly. For instance, the discussion about the problem with the photos and the specific request for the shots could be more distinctly separated.

task achievement

Ensure that the tone remains consistent and friendly throughout the letter, as this fits the informal nature of your request. Currently, it is well maintained.

task achievement

To achieve a complete response, providing a bit more detail on why these photos are important (e.g., specific memories or further activities planned with the photos) could enhance the letter.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear and logical structure, making it easy to follow the writer's train of thought.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately used, adding a personal touch to the letter.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend, making the request feel genuine and heartfelt.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

194 words

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