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The chart and tabl ebelliw give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart and tabl ebelliw give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates the percentages of visitors
travelled
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travelling
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 to the
Australia
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Australian
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 resort
while
 the table displays the data of travellers about activities, accommodation and length of stay based on the four different regions.
Overall
,
Asia
nation
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nations
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 had a significantly higher proportion of
tourists
like
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who like
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 to travel to Australia in
short
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a short
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 period
while
 enjoying expensive trips
whereas
 other
region
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regions
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 had the lowest number of
tourists
 trying to experience unique adventures. Looking at the total figure and main interest of vacationers,
Asia
 placed at
the
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apply
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number one with less than
two fifths
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two-fifths
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while
the
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America placed
at
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apply
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the
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third place
accounted
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accounting
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 for just below a fifth. Both of them preferred sightseeing.
Next,
Europe fell a close
second,
accounting
at
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for
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 slightly more than a third and they chose to swim or
sunbathing
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sunbathe
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. As for the lowest
tourists
 held by other states with one in ten and they like to surf. Regarding
night
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nights
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 spent, both Europe and
tourists
 from other regions picked camping or caravan to spend their night
with
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for
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 more than a week, 16 and 10 days, respectively.
In contrast
,
the
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America and
Asia
 were more into luxury
hotel
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hotels
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 but American people
stays
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stayed
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 two times longer than
Asia
 visitors.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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