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PA friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. Yoh have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves, say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her, explain how to apply for the job

#pa #friend #job #country #yoh #company #sort #work
Dear Jas, I hope you are doing well. I'm very excited to tell you about the job posting in my country. The company is looking for a
full time
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 front desk officer matching perfectly with your diploma.
This
position
 is high in demand in our region. You can visit their website to check the roles and responsibilities as they mainly require
2 year
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 diploma in
this
 field.
This
position
 will evolve to assist visitors with accommodation services and help them with booking
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hotels. I think
this
 opportunity will prove great to you as
this
 is your dream job and you have some sort of skills and certifications already to excel
such
 as effective communication and customer satisfaction skills. To build up your carry in
this
 field,
this
 will be a great point to start. To apply for
this
position
 you can simply visit
Linkedln
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LinkedIn
 or Indeed and upload a resume. The employer response is
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 quick to the application, you might get
call
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 within an hour or two after the submission of your application. I really hope that you get
this
position
 so that we can explore the country together. All the best! Warm Regards, Harman
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task achievement
Try to provide more details about the application process, such as mentioning any specific documents required besides the resume or perhaps a cover letter. This will make the task response more complete.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by using linking words or phrases to better connect the ideas across paragraphs, making it easier for the reader to follow your train of thought.
coherence cohesion
Review your work for minor grammatical or phrasing errors. For example, "build up your carry" should be "build up your career." Correcting these small mistakes can improve overall clarity.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is very friendly and appropriately matches the context of writing to a friend, which makes the letter engaging.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-handled, giving the letter a personal touch and appropriate structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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