The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000

The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000
The bar chart illustrates the rates of travellers that
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bus,
car
,
bike
, and foot in a European City in 1960, 1980, and 2000, with the data measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is clearly
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seen that only people in 1980 with around 15% to 25%, had similar interest
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their transportation choices. In terms of the highest proportions, at more than 35%,
car
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was the first option for travel in 2000.
This
number
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by people who
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foot
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as their main transport with around 33% in 1960.
Moreover
,
bus
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buses
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also
had a moderate rate at 27% in 1980 and
bike
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bikes
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accounted for 25% in 1960. Regarding the smallest amount of transport,
car
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cars
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in 1960 and
bike
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bikes
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in 2000 constituted exactly 5%, respectively.
Furthermore
, travellers who barely
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witnessed a slight increase to 8% in 2000.
Finally
, in 1980, the
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proportion
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accounted for
car
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cars
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with 23%,
bike
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bikes
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with 20% and foot with 17%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bike with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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