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The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007.

The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007.
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The table illustrates how the average number of
miles
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 travelled by adults per year varied in 1977 and 2007, broken down into seven modes of travel.
Overall
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, the average
miles
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 recorded annually by walking, bicycle, motorcycle, and bus saw a decline, meanwhile, the figure for
cars
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, trains, and
taxis
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 showed an upward trend. Remarkably,
cars
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 were the most popular vehicle with the highest travelled
distance
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 by adults throughout the surveyed period. An increase in the average
distance
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 travelled a year was witnessed in the use of
cars
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, trains, and
taxis
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. The figure for
cars
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 travelling
distance
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was
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doubled from 3.500
miles
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 in 1977 to 7.100
miles
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 in 2007, maintaining its position as the dominant mode of transport. A modest increase of 100
miles
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 was shown for trains,
while
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distance
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the distance
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 travelled per year of
taxis
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 experienced the most significant rise of fourfold to 800
miles
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 in 2007,
however
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, it remained less common than
cars
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 and
taxis
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.
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, bus travel
distance
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 was 800
miles
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 in 1977, prior to a drop of 300
miles
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2007
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in 2007
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. Bicycles and motorcycles were the least common among others, both starting with 100
miles
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 annually travelled before experiencing a minor decline in 2007, ending with 80
miles
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 and 90
miles
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, respectively. Adults walked an average of 400
miles
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 in 1977 and saw a decrease to 300
miles
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 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, cars, taxis, distance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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