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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph given provides information
of
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 overseas
students
 in Australia from four different
countries
.
Overall
, the number of
students
 from other
countries
 generally increased from 1982 to 2000. The statistics of Indonesia and Hong Kong
has
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 some similarities.
Since
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From
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 1982 to 1994 both of them picked up, but after 1994 the number of
students
 jumped.
However
 after 1997 the
quantity
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 of
students
 stood
at
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or collapsed, and at the
ending
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 of
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the 20th
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20th century
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 statistics started to
rising up
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rise
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 again.
The
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Malaysia
 and Singapore
has
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have
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 not a sharp rises or declines. In
the
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1982 all of
countries
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the countries
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has
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had
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 0 numbers except
Malaysia
,
they
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which
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 has about 5
students
 at
this
 moment.
This
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These
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 two
countries
also
 generally increased, but
Malaysia
 went down in
the
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1997. About 19 and 17
students
has
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 Singapore and
Malaysia
 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas students
  • country of residence
  • Australia
  • number of students
  • trends
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant increase
  • decrease
  • stable trends
  • period
  • comparisons
  • highlight
  • potential reasons
  • factors
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