Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?
Although
living in a house
has many advantages, others choose to live in an apartment
is much more beneficial. This
will show that the cons of living house
outweigh the pros.
To begin
with, one of the disadvantages of living in a home is that it requires time and money to build it. But, resting in an apartment
is more flexible due to
many reasons. Firstly
, for people with a low income would be a bad choice for a house
. For instance
, living in an apartment
you only have to pay for the electricity while
living in a house
means you have to pay for electricity and water.
However
, this
shift is not devoid of advantages. It’s clear that residing in a homestead contains many hectares and it creates many places for excess activities there. For instance
, indoor and outdoor activities, enjoy spending the whole arvo with friends, having some drinks around the fire pit. Secondly
, most of the abodes are more peaceful and quiet rather than flat. Thirdly
, for all the people who like having a garden, planting flowers and having the feeling of being in contact with nature, backyards are really important. Also
having that space of open air in your house
, allows you to invite friends and relatives to a barbecue, or for the lovers of bone fires, makes it possible to have a place for a fire pit. Finally
, most houses are renowned for their availability of car parking. For example
, in the USA, many people have their own garage and it paves the way to locate the car at any time even in drought and cool weather.
In conclusion, although
living in an apartment
is cheaper it doesn’t give you the privacy and the green space a house
can provide.Submitted by ieltswritingband99 on
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General
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that impact clarity. Reviewing and refining sentence structure would improve the overall fluency of the essay.
General
The essay could benefit from a more balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages of living in a house compared to an apartment.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each point made is directly related to the key argument of the paragraph. In some cases, the points about house living were somewhat repetitive (e.g., mentioning enjoying the outdoor space multiple times).
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
There are specific examples provided to illustrate points, which strengthens the argument.
Task Achievement
The writer makes a clear comparison between living in a house and living in an apartment, directly addressing the prompt.
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