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The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
#information #professions #uk #salaries #hours #week #profession
The graph illustrates some data about different jobs in the UK and their wages and
table
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the table
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 displays
average
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the average
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 working
hours
 in one
week
by
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for
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 several professions.  All in all, 
underground
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the underground
an underground
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driver
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driving
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 is the
most high
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highest
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payed
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paid
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job
 among all professions.
However
, teachers and firefighters
general
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generally
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 have more working
hours
 than others.
Firstly
, 
underground
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the underground
an underground
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 driver can get almost 50000 pounds and
this
 type of
works
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work
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 does not depend on experience.
Moreover
, other categories
such
 as teachers, police and firefighter have salaries in range from 20000 to 40000 $. To compare,
teaching
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a teaching
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job
 and
firefighter
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a firefighter
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job
 spend 55
hours
 per
week
 to work.
Secondly
, in
UK
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the UK
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 underground drivers
have used
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spend
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 only 36
hours
 per
week
to do
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doing
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 their
job
, but they
got
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get
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 the
most high
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highest
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check
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checks
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. Nurses and police give 38-40 average
hours
 in one
week
.
In addition
 to it, professors and firefighters reach almost 55
hours
 weekly.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • salary levels
  • disparities
  • correlation
  • average working hours
  • job satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • personal time
  • economic impact
  • social impact
  • job demand
  • skill levels
  • broad economy
  • profession
  • community contribution
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