The health benefits of physical exercise are well-known. Despite this, a lot of people do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to encourage them to exercise more?

These days health
exercises
are being abandoned
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started to
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day by day suddenly he stopped because he does not have the patient. In my
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I believe that
people
love to eat and do things
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while
they are sitting on
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sofa, Despite that they
also
prefer to play
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video
videe
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video
games for hours
than
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do some healthy
exercises
Sadly I can say most of the universe is doing the same based on
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done by
renowned
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magazine one out of five
people
loves to exercise regularly
while
the others stopped after the first day.
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, Some
people
are very helpful because they guide
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humans to the right path by motivating them to start some kind of
programs
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like diet and so on because when you have some kind of system in your food to follow you can manage to do
alot
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a lot
of
exercises
regularly, I would advise you to get into a gym that has pool,
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sauna
, dumbbells, perhaps taking a private coach could help you because he might be pushy coach, Sometimes it is very useful to have someone pushing on you
especailly
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especially
a trainer.
In addition
, you can practice with other friends so that everyone can support each other there
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be a trick
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work with
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a lot
of
people
which is hearing or listening to some motivational speeches I can
also
recommended
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some music to listen to
while
taking
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some
exercises
. In conclusion,
people
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to eat and sleep and play more than
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exercises
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eventually it is your life so save it.
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task achievement
In your introduction, clearly state the reasons why people do not exercise as well as potential solutions in a concise manner. Right now, the introduction is anecdotal and unfocused.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your ideas are clearly organized into separate paragraphs, each with a main idea and supporting evidence. This will strengthen coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Use specific examples and evidence to support your points. Avoid vague statements like 'studies show' without providing details.
task achievement
Your essay includes a variety of ideas and suggestions for encouraging people to exercise more, which shows thorough thinking.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates the importance of exercise and lifestyle choices.

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