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Band 7.5

Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community?

Some
people
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 believe that long-term
job
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 seekers who get government money should do voluntary
work
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 to give something back to the
community
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. I think
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 can be a good idea in many ways, but it should not be made a strict rule for everyone.
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, doing voluntary
work
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 can help
people
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 learn new skills and stay active. When someone is unemployed for a long time, they may start to lose confidence and feel useless. Working for the
community
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 can make them feel needed and important again.
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, if a person helps in a charity shop, they can learn to talk with customers, handle money, and
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 as part of a team. These skills are very helpful when they apply for a real
job
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 later.
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, voluntary
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 helps the
community
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 because more
people
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 can take part in cleaning parks, helping the elderly, or supporting local schools.
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, making
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work
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 compulsory may not be fair to everyone. Some
job
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 seekers may already be trying very hard to find
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, and others may have personal problems,
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 as health issues or family duties.
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, a single mother with two young children might not have enough time to do unpaid
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while
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 caring for her family.
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, the government should make voluntary
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 a choice, not a requirement. It should
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 give support, like training and transport, to help
people
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 take part more easily. In conclusion, voluntary
work
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 can be very useful for
job
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 seekers and for the
community
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.
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, it should be offered as an opportunity to learn and give back, but not as a punishment. If
people
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 choose to do it willingly, everyone will benefit in a positive way.

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task response
Your twin idea is clear and fair. You show both sides and give a view. This is good for the task. Keep this balance and add one strong point or rule to show clear policy thinking.
task response
Clear view and balanced argument.
coherence cohesion
Good use of examples to back points.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term job seekers
  • Government benefits
  • Voluntary work
  • Community service
  • Employability
  • Sense of purpose
  • Mental health
  • Stigma
  • Unemployed
  • Public funds
  • Positively impact
  • Community
  • Exploit
  • Vulnerable individuals
  • Devalue
  • Volunteerism
  • Informal contributions
  • Skill-matching
  • Beneficial and fulfilling
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