The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The illustration depicts the manufacture of how making
sugar
cane.
Overall
, by having a cursory glance on
the diagram.It can be clearly seen that the Change preposition
at
7 step
production begins with the growth of Add a hyphen
7-step
sugar
canes
from the farm and ends with Fix the agreement mistake
cane
producing
of Replace the word
the production
sugar
.This
is achieved by cultivating sugar
from 12-18 months.
The process starts with growing
of Correct article usage
the growing
sugar
canes
from 12-18 months.Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Then
, they are harvested by the farmer and truck.After that, the sugar
canes
begins to Fix the agreement mistake
cane
crushed
to produce juice using Add a missing verb
be crushed
machine
.Add an article
the machine
a machine
Then
, the juice has been
purified by Wrong verb form
was
limestone
filter.
In step 5, juice has evaporated to Correct article usage
a limestone
becomes
syrup Wrong verb form
become
throughout
heat.Change preposition
through
Next,
when they have been correctly evaporated, they starts
to centrifuge it by doing it Change the verb form
start
seprates
Correct your spelling
separates
separate
sugar
crystals from syrup
.The final stage in Add an article
the syrup
this
process will be to drying and cooling of the sugar
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