The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The illustration depicts the manufacture of how making
sugar
cane.
Overall
, by having a cursory glance
on
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the diagram.It can be clearly seen that the
7 step
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production begins with the growth of
sugar
canes
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from the farm and ends with
producing
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of
sugar
.
This
is achieved by cultivating
sugar
from 12-18 months. The process starts with
growing
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of
sugar
canes
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cane
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from 12-18 months.
Then
, they are harvested by the farmer and truck.After that, the
sugar
canes
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begins to
crushed
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to produce juice using
machine
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.
Then
, the juice
has been
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purified by
limestone
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filter. In step 5, juice has evaporated to
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syrup
throughout
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heat.
Next,
when they have been correctly evaporated, they
starts
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to centrifuge it by doing it
seprates
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separates
separate
sugar
crystals from
syrup
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the syrup
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.The final stage in
this
process will be to drying and cooling of the
sugar
.
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