Fast food has become more common in recent years. Some people think that it has a negative effect on lifestyles and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

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decades

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junk

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a more common

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option

for people. Many specialists believe that

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type of

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not feed the body with the nutrients,

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vitamines

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, so it has

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impact on lifestyle and diet. Personally, I believe that fast

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should be excluded from

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the diet

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in order to live longer and healthier.

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the constant progress, our society faces too many opportunities regarding

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food

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options.

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increasingly

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popularity

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towards

unhealthy

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has increased.

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teenagers are more into fast

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their parents

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to like

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kind of ”quilty pleasure” after an arduous working day.

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, nutritionists feel that it affects a lot the quality of health and longevity. The body needs minerals and vitamins for

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normal functionality.

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of nutrients are provided by organic versions of

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, not

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particularly

unhealthy types. To illustrate, the routine that you have says a lot about your lifestyle and how quality is the

food

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that you eat.

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, it can not be denied that the negative effects which come from an unbalanced

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diet

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reflected in the level of concentration and the

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physical

ability.

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, what you eat

make

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up your whole personality. Fast

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is an ”easy” option

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food

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, but it can have harmful

efects

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effects

on health. Even

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though it

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has increased in the

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decades among different ages, it should be avoided from your diet and replaced with more organic and plant-based options.

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Make sure to structure your essay with clearer topic sentences and logically organized paragraphs. While your points are relevant, they sometimes lack clarity due to minor grammatical errors.

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Use more precise and complex language to support your arguments. Provide more detailed and more specific examples to strengthen your points.

coherence and cohesion

Work on sentence variety and coherence in linking ideas between sentences and paragraphs, as this would improve the overall flow of the essay.

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You have addressed the topic and provided an opinion which is maintained throughout the essay.

coherence and cohesion

The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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