Fast food has become more common in recent years. Some people think that it has a negative effect on lifestyles and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

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became
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a more common
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option
for people. Many specialists believe that
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type of
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not feed the body with the nutrients,
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vitamines
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impact on lifestyle and diet. Personally, I believe that fast
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should be excluded from
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in order to live longer and healthier.
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the constant progress, our society faces too many opportunities regarding
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food
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options.
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increasingly
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towards
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has increased.
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, statistically talking, now not
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teenagers are more into fast
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their parents
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to like
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kind of ”quilty pleasure” after an arduous working day.
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, nutritionists feel that it affects a lot the quality of health and longevity. The body needs minerals and vitamins for
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normal functionality.
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of nutrients are provided by organic versions of
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, not
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particularly
unhealthy types. To illustrate, the routine that you have says a lot about your lifestyle and how quality is the
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that you eat.
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, it can not be denied that the negative effects which come from an unbalanced
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diet
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can
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reflected in the level of concentration and the
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physical
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, what you eat
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makes
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up your whole personality. Fast
food
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is an ”easy” option
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food
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, but it can have harmful
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effects
on health. Even
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though it
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has increased in the
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decades among different ages, it should be avoided from your diet and replaced with more organic and plant-based options.
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