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The graph below gives information about the technology that households in one US city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014

The graph below gives information about the technology that households in one US city used for watching television between 2004 and 2014
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The line chart illustrated provides information regarding the technology usage in an American city household for television entertainment in a decade.
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, there are two trends an increasing trend with Satellite and Internet, meanwhile, a moderately decreasing trend is happening to Broadcast and Cable.
According to
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 the line chart, there is a relatively huge rise with the Internet having approximately 10
thousand
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 in 2004 to 200
thousand
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 in the span of ten years.
While
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 a sharp decrease
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in
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 Broadcast is happening from almost 100
thousand
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 at the start to barely 25
thousand
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 in 2014. Moving on to the Cable it seems to be inconsistent and has
fluctations
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fluctuations
 peaking at 2008 with relatively close 110
thousand
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,
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, to the Satelite that looks to be growing particularly slower than all the other categories having the highest point at respectful 120
thousand
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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