You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: where you went what you saw there how you felt about it

Dear Ava, How're you doing? it's been a
while
since we
last
talked.I want to share my recent experience with the museum that I visited
while
I was on my trip to India. During my visit, I had a chance to visit the museum in
west
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Delhi which has a collection rich with art, and jewellery from all around the world. It was an area with lots of traffic during rush hours. I saw jewellery and art collections from 1800 to today's date and they are fully preserved and secured by the gallery. I
also
came across and beautiful gown worn by the Indian Queen named Rajeshvari in the 1500 's . The outfit has beautiful work of embroidery and I think I will always remember
this
outfit till the day I die. The photography wasn't allowed at the gallery
otherwise
, I would have shown you the majestical piece of clothing. The experience was beyond words, It made me feel like I was living in that era when these pieces were created , after looking at them. It was quite refreshing for me as I was exhausted from the trip. I would love for you to have
this
experience as I know you like art so much. Hope to meet you soon so that I can share the details about the rest of my vacation. Warm regards, Rani
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task achievement
While your letter is detailed and covers all aspects of the prompt, a bit more elaboration on your feelings and overall impression could improve the response further.
coherence cohesion
There were a few minor grammatical and punctuation errors. Be cautious about these to ensure your message is clear.
task achievement
You provided a comprehensive overview of your visit to the museum, which effectively achieved the task of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Your letter had a clear logical structure and each paragraph focused on a different aspect of your visit, such as location, exhibits, and personal feelings.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing were appropriate and added a personal touch to your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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