You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

Dear Friend, I hope
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letter finds you well, and I
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hope that you are feeling much better now. I was very sorry to hear about your accident, and we really missed you on match day — your absence was noticeable, and everyone kept asking about you. Describing the match, it was a cloudy day, and we played against the Brampton team. Both teams performed very well, and it was an unforgettable experience. The crowd was cheering loudly, and the scores stayed very close throughout the game. In the end, Aman made an excellent shot, and the whole field erupted with excitement. I am happy to tell you that our team won the match! At
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we were nervous and worried, especially thinking about you, but the coach encouraged us to give our best and make everyone proud. As you know, we had
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a lot, and our hard work really paid off. All of us are praying for your speedy recovery and hope that you can rejoin us soon. Everyone is sending their best wishes, and we are all excited to see you back on the field. Take care and get well soon! Gurjot Boparai

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task
Your letter answers all parts: who won, how the day was, and how you felt. To be clear, try to keep one big idea in each part so the read is easy.
coherence
Use small words to move from one idea to the next, like then, also, and so. This helps flow.
coherence
Try to keep one main idea in each part about the day. Some parts tell more than one idea at once.
tone
The tone is warm and kind for a friend in hospital, which fits well.
tone
Warm and kind tone for a friend.
content
Clear answer to all parts of the task (who won, day, and feelings).
structure
Good closing that shows care for the friend.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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