Some people think that success the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways

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mentality is generally separated,

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others consider it applies to different

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because no condition could truly point out any knowledge skills.

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, we often tend to be influenced by some of the people’s fortunate

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. Daily we see many successful persons in any

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or even in the next house. They have

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impact on our perception towards them, as we unconsciously envy them and automatically expect them to be clever enough. It is accepted a long time ago that appearance

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our first impression of the person and it plays an important role. Assuming we saw somewhere a man who really has an expensive possessive and the highest post at his job,

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, our thoughts are how intelligent he is. More often

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expensive stuff is not an indicator of

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education.

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the number of people who gauge really essential features which in my view present the main characteristic.

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these are simple and obvious aptitudes which are not observed by inattentive people.

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in other

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we can verify how well-read the person is. In

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educated one will not have words parasites or long pauses during his conversation.

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we notice

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of the topics as he is able to support

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intelligence relies on some personal abilities which

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up within our regular routine. Eventually

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success is only a huge picture, but our actions are direct reflections of our abilities.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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