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Some people think that success the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways

#people #success #measure #intelligence
The society’s
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 view on
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mentality is generally separated,
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are
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 sure it depends on your luck,
when
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 others consider it applies to different
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. Mostly I am giving up to the second type of people
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 because no condition could truly point out any knowledge skills.
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, we often tend to be influenced by some of the people’s fortunate
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lives
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. Daily we see many successful persons in any
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: on social media, at work, on
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 or even in the next house. They have
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 impact on our perception towards them, as we unconsciously envy them and automatically expect them to be clever enough. It is accepted a long time ago that appearance
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 our first impression of the person and it plays an important role. Assuming we saw somewhere a man who really has an expensive possessive and the highest post at his job,
firstly
, our thoughts are how intelligent he is. More often
this
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in
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 expensive stuff is not an indicator of
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 education.
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 the number of people who gauge really essential features which in my view present the main characteristic.
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 these are simple and obvious aptitudes which are not observed by inattentive people.
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, on the top of the list is man’s speech and
behavior
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,
in other
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 we can verify how well-read the person is. In
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 educated one will not have words parasites or long pauses during his conversation.
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 we notice
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the diversity
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 of the topics as he is able to support
thus
 it emphasize the experience from different spheres. Summing up the greatest basic understanding of
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intelligence relies on some personal abilities which
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 up within our regular routine. Eventually
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success is only a huge picture, but our actions are direct reflections of our abilities.
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