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In the future all cars, buses, trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disavatages

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Recently, we can see that the automation revolution has been applied
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transportation will be one of them.
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, the public vehicles without drivers will be the important consideration that it can bring to us many
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benefits
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against
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driving automation devices, the labour cost will be reduced significantly, and
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personal senses or attitudes will be avoided too. The
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 the cost of automatic devices will be cheaper
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many businesses can afford to do that
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 of providing automatic tools on vehicles will be improved significantly. The system can be
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 and the time management must be
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 so that the traffic jam would be mitigated as an example of
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 of,
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social development,
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driverless- especially for the public transportation sector- will be becoming more and more popular, and it shall be replacing
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the traditional mode soon.
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 us to have more better life.
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task achievement
To enhance task response, consider adding more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mention case studies or statistics where driverless technology has been implemented successfully.
task achievement
For clarity, ensure that all your ideas are fully fleshed out. Some points are good but could be expanded for greater comprehensiveness.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'benifits' instead of 'benefits' and 'agaisnt' instead of 'against'. These small errors can detract from the overall readability of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Improve the transitions between your main points to make the essay flow more smoothly. This will help maintain logical structure and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in framing your arguments well.
task achievement
You have addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showing a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of your essay is logical, and your main points are easily identifiable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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