In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this satetement?

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whether
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choose
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without
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, or
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whether
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they enjoy their
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with
work
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. In my view, I contend that
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without working
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view, some
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argue that Stress and hard
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can harm themselves. If the individual
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in their
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hobbies
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, they may be probably more
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creativity
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is not true, because
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hippies
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can't be enough to support
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in their
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, being a printer or photographer
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not bring a lot of money.
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, working could enhance
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's living standards. ‏
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leisure
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is capable
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indivcduals
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individuals
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psychology Being busy all the
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, will definitely make
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therd
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tired
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.
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, they are completely wrong. When
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posees
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posses
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the
capabity
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capability
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,
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will make them relax.
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lesions
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time
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as using smart phone for
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time
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or Watching TV bead to many diseases like
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obesity. So, activity is
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of sport
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that is
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benetical
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beneficial
for health. ‏Contrary to the individual who
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that Working is useful for
people
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. Constantly
worting
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working
and the individual to be independent. To
ithestrate
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illustrate
, they get
salary
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from the job which would be probed help them to buy their needs.
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,
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may reduce
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crime in society.
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stay without doing uschal
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and
investing their
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, they will
remaine
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remain
unknown about
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.
People
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operence
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experience
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Working can gain many experiences like using
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a computer
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and calculating.
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, they used to think and innovate in
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their
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. ‏In conclusion, Working is inconsequential for Some
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people
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us opportunities to explore the
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critivity
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creativity
.
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,
people
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have to
work
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hard and invest
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to prevent
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many problems.
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Task response
Your essay addresses the task prompt; however, ensure your main points directly relate to whether people will buy printed newspapers or books due to online availability.
Coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, try to connect your ideas more logically and make better use of linking words and phrases. For instance, use words like 'furthermore', 'on the contrary', and 'in conclusion' more accurately.
Task response
Your essay’s main points should be supported with more specific and relevant examples. Instead of general statements about hobbies not supporting life, relate them directly to newspapers and books, such as how digital media affects their consumption.
Coherence and cohesion
Make sure your introduction clearly presents your stance on the issue. It helps to outline your main points briefly here.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task response
You attempt to consider various perspectives in your essay, which is excellent for task achievement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • digitalization
  • online sources
  • convenience
  • cost savings
  • environmental benefits
  • tactile experience
  • distractions
  • collectibility
  • digital divide
  • economic limitations
  • infrastructural limitations
  • digital fatigue
  • prolonged exposure
  • psychological impact
  • educational impact
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • printed media
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