Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.
More people with health issues are becoming increasingly interested in trying
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of consulting their usual doctor. I believe Linking Words
that is
a negative development because of the lack of medical credibility of Linking Words
alternative
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doctors are equipped with scientific medical knowledge from their degrees, a lot of Linking Words
alternative
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practitioners
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practices
that lack scientific-proven data and methodologies. Use synonyms
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, in Indonesia, many Linking Words
alternative
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practitioners
, which are called "dukun" don't have any medical background. Use synonyms
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, they are mostly associated with superstitions rather than sciences.
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alternative
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practitioners
are not legally recognized, many of the Use synonyms
medications
that they use are not supervised. Use synonyms
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practices
are already widely accepted, the government still don't consider these Use synonyms
practices
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medications
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could lead to many medical side effects for the patients. Linking Words
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alternative
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medical practitioner in the city of Madiun in 2012.
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practices
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