Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
These days, the argument over whether governments should expend public funds to save
languages
which are spoken by only a few people
has not been settled yet. Some people
advocate for such
investment, while
others consider that it is a waste of money
.
On the one hand, language
is an important part of a community's identity and culture. Losing a language
means losing a unique way of expressing ideas, values, and history. These languages
contain a lot of valuable knowledge, including traditional culture, history and the way of communication. Moreover
, people
speak different languages
and think in different ways. To really understand their way of thinking, one needs to comprehend their languages
. Each language
is unique. For instance
, Chinese is known for its flexibility. Japanese is politeness. French is beauty. Therefore
, the government should spend money
protecting these endangered languages
.
On the other hand
, some people
believe that this
is an inefficient of using public money
. To be specific, they think that resources should be focused on more important issues such
as healthcare, education, and infrastructure. For example
, if the government expend the money
that prepare for language
saving on improving medical facilities, more lives will be saved. As a result
, people
’s living quality will probably be improved.
In conclusion, while
it seems reasonable to spend money
on more meaningful things than saving the languages
, the existence of them is also
important. In my opinion, I believe that government should only spend enough money
on the protection of languages
, but not too much.Submitted by 2575444164 on
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task achievement
You have provided a balanced discussion of both views, and your conclusion expresses a reasonable stance. However, your ideas could be more comprehensive and detailed. Try to expand on each point more thoroughly and provide more specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Your essay follows a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both views, and a conclusion. However, the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Use more linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains clear, well-supported main points. Some of the main points in your essay are not fully developed, and there is a need for better illustration and examples to back up your arguments.
task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the specific benefits and drawbacks of spending money on the preservation of endangered languages. Consider including examples of successful language preservation efforts or areas where funds are critically needed.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly sets up the topic and presents both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a conclusion that summarizes your stance and the main points of the essay effectively.
Your opinion
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