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Band 3.5

he diagram below shows the product life-cycle of the car.

he diagram below shows the product life-cycle of the car.
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The given illustration reveals the
life-cycle
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life cycle
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 of the car. First of all, components are formed from both mined raw and recycled materials.
Afterwards
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 components are formed and delivered to factories. Raw and recycled materials may
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 be transported to the factories. Next comes the manufacturing part, after which the cars are sold and used by several owners. After consumption, the cars are sold for scrap, and recycled, coming back to the first stage of the
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, or those which can not be recycled, are scrapped, which means the end of the cycle

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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