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The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
two
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 graphs illustrate the differences in typical
office
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 design in
two
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 countries, Japan and America.
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, the Japanese typical
office
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 shows less privacy compared to the
American
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 one. In
Japanese
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 typical
office
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 relies on the open-officeoffice pattern, with no walls between different offices. The
American
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 typical
office
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 gives more privacy to
employees
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; with all managers
have
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 their own offices, other
employees
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 share an open space in the centre. A typical
American
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office
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 consists of 7 rooms. Three of them are allocated for managers,
two
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 as conference rooms, one for storage, and the
last
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 room is used as a printer copier.
While
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 in the centre of the
office
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, there are eight chairs for regular
employees
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. Notably, the
American
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 typical
office
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 has
two
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 windows on the left and right sides. For the Japanese typical
office
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, the situation is considerably different. The department manager's
office
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 is located in the middle of the top side, and in front of it there are
two
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 sections. Each section contains a manager and 6
employees
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, and there is just one window behind the department manager's
office
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, office, american, employees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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