The bar chart below shows the enrolment of students in music at an Australian university from 2000 to 2006 and the pie chart shows their career choices after graduating. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the enrolment of students in music at an Australian university from

2000 to 2006 and the pie chart shows their career choices after graduating.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

where relevant.
The given bar chart indicates comprehensive information regarding a gender-based comparison of the ratio of students registering in
music
in a 6-year period commencing in 2000 and culminating in 2006,
along with
a pie chart illustrating professional pursuits in the same interval. From an
overall
perspective, it is starkly apparent that females showed more tendency toward
music
compared with males.
Besides
, the majority of students were occupied in different fields of career. Upon more rigorous scrutiny, it can be deduced that the number of girls applying for
music
stood at one-fifth in 2000, the same as the portion for boys.
However
,
while
the figure for females displayed an upward trend hitting an all-time high in 2006 at 60%, the amount for boys flattened out after some fluctuations at 20%. As regards the pie chart, it can be discerned that more than half of those who studied
music
pursued their career in an altered field,
whereas
, a fourth of them had similar jobs.
However
, a minority of them (one-fifth) worked in the same field.
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