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You have recently moved to different house. Write a letter to an English speaking, friend. In your letter. Explain why you have moved Describe the new house Invite your friend to come and visit

#house #english #friend #visit
Dear Shaila, I’m writing
this
 letter to inform you about the
house
 that I recently purchased. As you already know, I used to live in
stony
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 Creek, but that was situated 13 km away from where my work office is located., So
due to
 that, I had to spend two hours
for
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commuting every day.
Also
, I could not get enough time to study for the upcoming competitive field exam because of that.
Finally
, I came to know about a realtor from one of my
relative
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. He helped me to find a new
house
 near to my workplace.
This
 property is located within
2
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a 2
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km range of my office.
This
 one is
three
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a
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storey
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three-storey
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house
 with
garden
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a garden
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 in the front and
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool and sauna in
backyard
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the backyard
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. It has five bedrooms,
dining
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a dining
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 area and
large
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a large
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 drawing room. I have planned
inauguration
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an inauguration
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 on second July next week. So
this
 is my humble request to you to join us on
this
 special day. You will
tranquil
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 by the surprise, I have arranged for you. We will discover other unique features of
this
 stunning
house
 together. I’m expecting you to be present on
this
 day, Your best friend, DK
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coherence cohesion
Try to refine sentence structure to avoid minor grammatical errors.
task achievement
Make sure to give a bit more detail about why the move was necessary, such as specific challenges faced with the previous commute.
task achievement
The letter clearly explains the reason for the move.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is warm and inviting, suitable for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes logical and well-structured paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear opening and closing which makes the letter more coherent.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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