The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
The chart illustrates the
number
of 2 types of travellers (staying on cruise ships, staying on the
island
) that visited the Caribbean
island
, from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, there is a continuous increase trend
of
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the cruise visitor
number
,
while
the
island
visitors line fluctuated.
Moreover
, the total
number
of tourists is rising over the period. In 2010, The triangle line started at around 0.7
million
of
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visitors, which is more than ship visitors (approximately 0.3
million
people). After that, the
number
of
island
travellers reached
to
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1.5
million
people in 2013s, remaining at the same rate until 2015.
On the other hand
,
the rectangles
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graph
declined slightly in 2012 before rising continuously to 2
million
people
at the end
of the
graph
, higher than
another
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graph
. The popularity of the Caribbean
island
increased significantly, starting at 1
million
before reaching
to
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3.5
million
at the end
of the period in 2017, the peak of the
graph
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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