In the future all cars, buses, and train will be driverless. The only people travelling inside the vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages?
Driverless
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The driverless
system
is one of technologies
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the technologies
that is
planned to be integrated in
all vehicles which makes all Change the preposition
into
with
people
will become passengers. I believe autonomous system
in Fix the agreement mistake
systems
vehicle
will deliver more benefits than drawbacks because Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
it
can reduce Correct pronoun usage
they
collision
and congestion
.
Firstly
, driverless
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a driverless
system
can avoid
Verb problem
prevent
people
to have
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from
collision
because it has Fix the agreement mistake
collisions
advance
sensors to detect upcoming objects. Replace the word
advanced
Hence
, driverless
system
have faster Fix the agreement mistake
systems
reflect
than ordinary Replace the word
reflection
people
to decelerate the vehicle
. Furthermore
, this
system
can reduce human error that usually become
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becomes
main
cause of accidents, Add an article
the main
such
as microsleeping or fail
to push Replace the word
failure
pedal
brake. Add an article
the pedal
Therefore
, it will reduce risk
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the risk
to have
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of having
collision
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a collision
during
driving. Change preposition
while
For example
, when people
are exhausted and not able to drive, driverless
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the driverless
system
will take a role to drive and maintain safety
during driving.
Secondly
, autonomous
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the autonomous
vehicle
system
can Fix the agreement mistake
systems
also
reduce congestion
because it has safe
driving Add an article
a safe
system
that obeys safety
driving rules based on regulation. With
using a certain algorithm, Change preposition
By
this
system
will manage people
's mobility to increase driving effectiveness which can decrease driving lead time. For instance
, when volume
of Add an article
the volume
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the vehicle
a vehicle
vehicle
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vehicles
are
quite high during rush hour, Change the verb form
is
driverless
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the driverless
system
will have safety
driving style by not taking unnecessary Replace the word
a safe
overtake
which may increase Correct subject-verb agreement
overtakes
level
of Add an article
the level
congestion
on the roads.
In conclusion, driverless
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a driverless
the driverless
system
in vehicle
will have more advantages than disadvantages because it can possibly reduce Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
risk
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the risk
to have
Verb problem
of
collision
and Fix the agreement mistake
collisions
congestion
during
driving. Change preposition
while
Hence
, people
will experience comfortable and safety
driving which can reduce stress and save Replace the word
safe
people
's life
on the roads.Fix the agreement mistake
lives
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