The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
The illustrated table depicts the changes
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international
tourists
in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. Generally, the noticeably high indexes between all the
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was shown by
the
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Europe,
whereas
the lowest was shown by
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East. First of all, from the period of
1990
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1990,
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almost all the indexes of all countries rose gradually, but between
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2000 and
2005
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2005,
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the number of
tourists
from America declined slightly (118.2
millions
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and 113.2
millions
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respectively).
Moreover
, in 2005 the vast majority of
tourists
were from Europe with
four
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hundred million index,
while
in
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the lowest rating showed the
tourists
from Africa with only 28.7
millions
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. In fact,
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difference of more than
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millions
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was between 1990 and 1995 in the indexes of European
tourists
, with 280.2
millions
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and 390.3
millions
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respectively,
on the contrary
, the slightest change
also
in
this
period has been shown by the
tourists
from
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East with only one point five
millions
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difference.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, millions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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