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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
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The illustrated table depicts the changes
of
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 international
tourists
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 in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. Generally, the noticeably high indexes between all the
period
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 was shown by
the
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Europe,
whereas
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 the lowest was shown by
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 East. First of all, from the period of
1990
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1990,
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 almost all the indexes of all countries rose gradually, but between
the
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2000 and
2005
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2005,
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 the number of
tourists
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 from America declined slightly (118.2
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millions
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 and 113.2
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millions
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million
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 respectively).
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, in 2005 the vast majority of
tourists
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 were from Europe with
four
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 hundred million index,
while
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in
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contrast
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 the lowest rating showed the
tourists
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 from Africa with only 28.7
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millions
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million
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. In fact,
highest
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 difference of more than
hundred
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millions
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million
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 was between 1990 and 1995 in the indexes of European
tourists
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, with 280.2
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millions
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million
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 and 390.3
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millions
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million
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 respectively,
on the contrary
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, the slightest change
also
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 in
this
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 period has been shown by the
tourists
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 from
Middle
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 East with only one point five
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millions
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million
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 difference.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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