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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart below illustrates the quantities of three kinds of products in a garment factory between the years 1990 and 2010. It's clear that except for
suit
, the others all witnessed a generally increasing trend. In 1990, around 15
millions
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of
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suits were produced in that factory, followed by
dress
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dresses
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 and
coat
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coats
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 with
the
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figures for about 10
millions
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million
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 and 7.5
millions
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million
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 respectively. After that, the number of
suit
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suits
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 saw a significant upward and peaked at approximately 22.5
million
 in 1995, which is almost double the quantities of
dress
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dresses
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 and
coat
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coats
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 and both of them reached about 12.5
million
 in that year. After 1995,
coat
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coats
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rase
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rose
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 quickly and
had overtaken
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suit
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suits
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 to be the highest with around 18
million
 in 2000,
whereas
 merely over 10
million
of
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dresses were made in that year. During the remaining period, both
coat
 and dress experienced a normal increase and
finally
 reached 25
million
 for the highest and 15
million
 for the lowest respectively,
while
 only
suit
 witnessed a
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fluctuation
 and went to under 20
million
 in 2010.
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