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The maps shows changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.

The maps shows changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005.
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The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 over a year period from 1980 to 2005. The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the coastal town of Youngsville between 1980 and 2005.
Overall
, a comparison of
two
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 maps reveals a complete transformation from a largely rural to
mainly
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a mainly
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 urban area. In the year 1980, the town was a much greener
residental
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residential
 area with
the
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 large number of trees and individual houses, but during the 25 years, the town was a number of
significiant
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significant
 changes. The most
noticiable
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noticeable
 is that all of the trees in the south of the
River
 Alanah were chopped down, with all the houses along the railway line being demolished to make way for
skyscarapers
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skyscrapers
.
Moreover
, a new industrial zone with warehouses and factories SPRANG UP around the school and airport.
In contrast
, only a few trees in the north of the
river
 remained. The woodland was cleared and converted into a golf course, a park, and car
parting
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 facilities.
Further
 developments were the construction of a stadium next to the
north- east
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northeast
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 corner of the lake and the extension of the railway line from the
river
 running
direclty
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directly
 to the north. A marina was
also
 constructed at the mouth of the
river
.
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