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Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. Your local museum has asked for feedback on your recent visit. Write to the museum. In your letter •Tell them what you liked and what you didn’t like •Make some suggestions for improvement •Describe some other exhibits you would like to see You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Mr. John, I am writing
this
 letter to provide the requested feedback from the museum " Lap of Nature". It was my first visit there. The experience was great and I found it very interesting.
Firstly
, I was so amazed by the interior design and the lighting system there. When I entered the building, there were different types of animations on the walls and numerous lights were giving them great effect to click some memorable pictures. The museum was so spacious and all the exhibits were with the information labels on them to provide brief details of it.
However
, the one thing which I would like to grab your attention is the refreshment and seating system. As the building is so wide it takes an hour to explore all the floors so there should be a refreshment and some chairs provided to take a break.
In addition
, to add more exhibits, I have often seen people have a keen interest in astronomy.
Overall
, the experience was commendable. I would highly recommend my family and friends to visit and check out the great art. Thanks for giving me a chance to write a review. Best regards, Peter
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grammar
Be mindful of the use of articles and prepositions. For example, 'the museum "Lap of Nature"' should be 'the museum, "Lap of Nature"' and 'with the information labels on them' would be more natural as 'with information labels on them.'
content
Consider providing a little more detail about why you think adding astronomy exhibits would be beneficial. This would make your suggestions more valuable.
structure
You have a clear and logical structure, making your letter easy to follow.
structure
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, which enhances readability.
tone
The greeting and closing are appropriate and add a personal touch to your letter.
content
Your letter addresses all parts of the task, which shows a complete response.
tone
The tone of your letter is suitable and polite, which makes it pleasant to read.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exhibit
  • architectural design
  • educational value
  • interactive displays
  • accessibility features
  • contemporary art
  • local history
  • child-friendly
  • guided tours
  • workshops
  • enhanced
  • crowded environment
  • seating
  • differently-abled visitors
  • activities
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