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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (Line graph)
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The given Line graph illustrates
about
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 The University Admission Office
is
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observed the amount of questions from three different communication methods
such
 as ( In person, by Letter/Email and
Telephone
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 ) from January to June
in
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2021.
Overall
, There are some fluctuations. The most noticeable trend is the people, who directly contact to Office.
Additionally
, The least number of enquiries
gotten
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 by letter and email, which
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plummeted rapidly
at the end
 of the period. In January, The folks, who contacted directly were over 400. after that was increased moderately until April at 1200.
Moreover
, it has surged by 800. Telephone was used to make enquiries at approximately 800.
while
 which was declined suddenly in February.
However
, It climbed in March. onwards It
hold
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 steadily after went up significantly
in
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 the end of the month. which reached at 166 in June.
According to
 the Line graph, The number of questions used by
Letter
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 and Email from January, which was at 400
consequently
, That was rose dramatically throughout the period.
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