The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph illustrates the top five most popular

celebrities

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celebrity

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profiles on

Instagram

in 2018 and 2021.

Overall

, all of the above influencers had almost 100

millions

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million

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views on

Instagram

in 2018.

Then

, they had reached at least 250

millions

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million

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followers

at the end

In addition

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apply

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apply

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, Cristiano

Ronaldo

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Ronaldo's

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account

got

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has

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more than 300

millions

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million

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followers and he

had

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has

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the biggest numbers among

Instagram

influencers.

Firstly

, in 2018 celebrities

such

as Selena Gomez, Ariana Grande and Cristiano Ronaldo had nearly the same number of

Instagram

users and they got more than 100

millions

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million

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views.

However

, Kylie Jenner and The Rock profiles had only nearly 90

millions

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million

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apply

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followers at that time.

Secondly

, in 2021 the situation had changed dramatically. All of these mentioned influencers hit

the

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250

millions

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million

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at least and especially Cristiano

Ronaldo

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Ronaldo's

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profile reached the highest number .

Moreover

, his

Instagram

account achieved approximately 320

millions

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million

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people's views in 2021.

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