You live in a rental flat.A few problems emerged since the last repair. Wrote a letter to your landlord. In your letter --what are the problems --give details of the last repair. --how you would like the landlord to solve current problems
Dear landlord,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you about a few problems in your flat.
Firstly
, last
week the electric bulbs were in good condition then
you sent an electrician and he replaced the lights with new ones. Now, tubes are fluctuating which creates problems during study time. As well as
our exams are starting next week. Also
, the light of new bulbs is very low than old ones. Moreover
, hot water is not coming into the bathroom. We may fall ill if this
is issue not solved as soon as possible.
A person came to repair the lights but he took 4 hours to install new stuff and according to
me, he also
didn't what is the main problem. He just fixed one light in these hours.
Could you send a professional to fix them before our tests? Solve the problem of hot water before winter otherwise
, it will create a serious issue.
I hope to hear a prompt response from your side regarding this
matter.
Yours sincerely,
Rohit SharmaSubmitted by harmandeep51075 on
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your letter by organizing issues and their related solutions more clearly. For example, dedicate a paragraph to each individual problem and its suggested solution.
task achievement
Ensure the details about the last repair are concise and directly related to the problems you're facing. This will improve the clarity and relevance of your response.
coherence cohesion
You may want to refine some of the sentence structures and choose clearer transitions between ideas to enhance readability.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is formal and appropriate for communicating with a landlord.
task achievement
You included clear details about both the problems encountered and what you would like the landlord to do to solve them.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are properly formatted and polite.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite