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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspaper and watch television news programs. Agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 say that
news
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 does not have any relation with most
people
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's
life
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lives
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, and reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and watching television for
news
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 is a
timewaste
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time waste
timewaster
time-waste
. I personally disagree with
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 viewpoint because knowing what is happening around us is necessary, as it helps us to
take
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make
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 many real-life decisions and increases our
knowledge
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. Reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and watching television
news
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 help us to know about what is happening in our surroundings. Social, political, cultural and national
happennings
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happenings
 of a country
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 ever-changing, and it is required for someone to keep himself updated with those
happennings
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happenings
. If
public
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the public
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 cannot access the
news
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 of the daily
happennings
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happenings
,
people
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 cannot
take
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make
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 any effective
decision
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decisions
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 in their personal
life
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lives
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.
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, recently, there has been a political instability in the Dhaka, the capital of Bangladesh. At that time, entering
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the city was unsafe, and
people
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therefore
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, postponed their plans
,
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 and waited for the situation to become stable.
Public
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 generally accessed the latest updates through television
news
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, and if they did not do that, they might be in danger
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 visiting Dhaka at that time.
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,
news
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 from electronic and print media helps a lot in our academic and real-life
knowledge
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.
This
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 helps in our academic research and study. We learn about what is happening in our surroundings and outside our country, and through our research and study, we can compare it to the past, and even have an idea about what can be happened in future
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, it enhances
real-life
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the real-life
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knowledge
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 of a person, and the person
become
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 more practical, and
knowlegeable
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knowledgeable
.
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, for
the
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academic research in the UK, many students rely on media
news
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 for their references.
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, reading and listening
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news
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 helps in several ways. It is necessary for our real-life and academic
knowledge
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 and
helpd
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helps
 us to
take
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make
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 real-life decisions.

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coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and try to improve sentence structure to enhance clarity and readability, such as refining awkward phrases and resolving some misspellings (e.g., ‘happennings’ should be ‘happenings’).
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coherence cohesion
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Your opinion

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