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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
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The pie charts illustrate the number of populations in
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and the prediction in 2050.
People
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 at 15-59
years
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 of
age
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 in
Yemen
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, started at 46.3% in the
year
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 2000. By 2050, the
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numbers
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number
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 will increase to 57.3%, which makes it the highest
population
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 group in
Yemen
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. The
people
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 at the
age
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 of 0-14
years
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 was standing at 50.1% in 2000, but later will decrease to 37.0% in 2050.
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, elderly
people
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 at 60
years
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 of
age
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 in 2000 were 3.6% of its
population
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.
However
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, the number will fall shortly to 5.7% in 2050, making it the lowest
population
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age
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 in
Yemen
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. In Italy,
people
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 at the
age
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 of 15-59
years
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 were at 61.6% in 2000.
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, in 2050 the
numbers
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 have lowered to 46.2%.
Older
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The older
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population
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 began at 24.1% in the
year
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 2000, but later the
numbers
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then
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 will rise to 42.3% in the following
year
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of
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2050. Young
people
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 aged 0-14
years
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 old in 2000 were at 14.3%, but sadly the
numbers
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 will drop to 11.5% by the
year
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 2050. In conclusion, in both countries
the
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people
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 from the ages of 15-59
years
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 in the
year
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 2050
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 predicted as the highest
population
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 growth. In
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Yemen
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Yemen,
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 the
population
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 of
people
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 from the
age
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 of 60
years
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 old is the lowest,
on the other hand
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, Italy’s 0-14
years
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 old is projected to be the lowest.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, people, years, age, year, numbers, population with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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