The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line graph
illustrated
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the
percentage
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differences
of
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between
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households
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with three types of electrical appliances between 1920 and 2019. The following line graph
portrayed
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how many hours per household
dedicated
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were dedicated
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to
housework
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per week in the same country and
time
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period
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.
Overall
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, these two statistics had developed a negative trend
whereas
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the
percentage
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ownership of electrical products increased, and
average
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an average
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number of hours spent on
housework
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had declined over these years.
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, the
percentage
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ownership of the three electrical appliances had all
went
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up, with the
refrigerator
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had
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having
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experienced the most significant rise.
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, it can be seen that washing machines had the greatest
percentage
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of ownership figured 40%, meanwhile, a neglectable
percentage
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of
households
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had access to a
refrigerator
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.
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, the usage of washing machines had increased by a mere 35% over the given
time
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period
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.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of
households
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owning a
refrigerator
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had drastically climbed up to 100% until 1960 and
level
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levelled
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off since
then
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. Eventually, 100% of
households
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owned a vacuum cleaner and a
refrigerator
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in 2019.
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, the citizens in
this
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particular country
had
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spent less
time
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on
housework
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per week over
this
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time
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period
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due to
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the usage of electrical appliances had greatly improved. From 1920 to 1960, there
were
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was
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a dramatic
downfall
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fall
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on
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in
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the average
time
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spent on
housework
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with an average of 10% less annually within these 40 years.
Afterthat
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, it ha started to reduce slowly over the
time
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period
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of 1960 and 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, housework, time, period, refrigerator with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ownership
  • Electrical appliances
  • Households
  • Decrease
  • Increase
  • Correlation
  • Period
  • Adoption
  • Universal
  • Minimal
  • Significant
  • Early years
  • Mid-century
  • Modern era
  • Data trends
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