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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in? Give reasons for your answer and invlude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some
people
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 argue that now is the best
time
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 in
history
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 to be living
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 some might think differently. I completely agree with
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 statement.
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, with the rise in technology and machines in the
last
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 century, I think that
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 is the best
time
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 in
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 to be alive.
Abundance
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The abundance
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 of resources and the use of these resources have led
humans
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 to live a very luxurious
life
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. With electricity and computers, we can communicate with anyone we want to in a matter of seconds, we can order food whenever we want and get tasks done without the need for any prior knowledge, making
life
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 very convenient. Machines have made human lives easier and reduced the need to do physical work. Improvement in healthcare has
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 led
humans
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 to live a longer
life
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 and have increased
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 expectancy.
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,
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 have learned how to live in peace with each other since the invention of the atomic bomb.
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,
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 to the way we live, there were a lot of wars in the early 20th century,
life
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 expectancy was low and
people
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 did not have equal rights meanwhile the majority of the work was done by human labour. Plagues and diseases like the black plague which reduced the population of Europe by half were very common in
history
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 as not a lot of
people
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 had access to medicine and healthcare.
Humans
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 did not have access to electricity and had no way of communicating which made it harder for
people
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 to communicate and made things more
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-consuming.
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, I think that
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 is the best
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 in
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 to be alive because of the luxury we have. I think that everyone should be grateful for being alive in
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 period of
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relevant specific examples
Your essay is clear and well-structured, but adding more specific examples would strengthen your points. Mentioning particular technologies, healthcare advancements, or concrete historical events could make your argument more compelling.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion is strong, but try to recap the main points you've discussed earlier in the essay to reinforce your argument and provide a sense of closure.
introduction conclusion present
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in presenting your argument effectively.
logical structure
Your essay is logically structured with a clear progression of ideas, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • quality of life
  • technological innovations
  • information and knowledge
  • human rights
  • gender equality
  • social justice
  • economic development
  • globalization
  • standard of living
  • travel
  • experience different cultures
  • environmental awareness
  • conservation efforts
  • sustainable future
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