Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
People have different views about the choices of several
companies
to advertise their products
by sponsoring sports
events. In my opinion, this
is the best option for companies
to promote their products
and have various beneficial
to Replace the word
benefits
sports
members.
On the one hand, there are two points for
support Change preposition
to
this
essay. First,
Sport
teams and players are given free equipment which they could not afford Change the noun form
Sports
otherwise
. It helps to encourage the player to focus on their sports
instead
of being distracted by financial worries. As a result
, players will have
any facilities to improve their skill and potential in Rephrase
not have
sports
that increase their chances of winning the game. Second,
companies
can showcase their products
on donation equipment. That were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
build
brand awareness of Fix the infinitive
to build
products
with sports
fans and make them think positively with a company
and have demand to buy products
. As a result
, sport
players have potential in their Change the noun form
sports
sports
and sports
sponsorship provides increased media exposure for a company
and its brand.
On the other hand
, some people argue the reason above because there
are worried about product categories which Correct pronoun usage
they
companies
sponsoring maybe
harmful to health. Correct your spelling
may be
For example
, tobacco and liqueur companies
their product are unhealthy and have any affected
Correct your spelling
effects
to
health. Change preposition
on
Sport
teams should not be allowed to sponsor Change the noun form
Sports
sports
events for
protect player’s health. Change preposition
to
While as
the part of Change preposition
As
company
they Add a comma
company,
needs
Change the verb form
need
consider
about Fix the infinitive
to consider
company
’s reputation because it usually
tightly linked to a player’s reputation. If the player is unsuccessful, or Add a missing verb
is usually
misbehave
it might affect product sales.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that to beneficial of Correct subject-verb agreement
misbehaves
sports
sponsoring
by Replace the word
sponsorship
companies
. Sports
members are received
various facilities to improve their potential Wrong verb form
receive
while
Correct article usage
the named
named
of Replace the word
name
company
will as Add an article
the company
know
Wrong verb form
known
in
Change preposition
by
sports
fans. So, I believe that have
many Correct subject-verb agreement
has
benefit
to them and Change to a plural noun
benefits
essential
to be successful.Add a missing verb
is essential
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task response
Work on providing clearer and more specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen the essay and make your points more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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task response
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame the essay effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The use of transitional phrases between points aids in the flow of the essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example