Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include: 1) What the gift is 2) Why you chose it 3) How it will be delivered. Write at least 150 words .

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Dear Jane, Hope you're doing well. I'm happy to hear that you've just moved to a new house.

New

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A new

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apartment

for living

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to live

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in is

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always beautiful. My relatives have already bought a new flat too. They

have

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had

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a little baby and decided to find something more spacious. On

this

occasion

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occasion,

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I bought a modest gift for you.

This

is a bed linen for your bedroom. I've chosen

such

present

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a present

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because it's always necessary at home and

pleased

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pleases

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for

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apply

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every owner. You can use it whenever you want and it'll never be useless. If I could visit you, I would take your gift but I work full time and my vacation won't be soon.

However

, my sister, Emma, lives in the same place and she can deliver it to you. I’d

really

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be really

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grateful if you could write

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to me

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the

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about the

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best time when you are free and ready to get the present from Emma. Write soon. Best wishes, Julia

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coherence cohesion

Consider using more transitional words or phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.

task achievement

Ensure all sentences contribute explicitly to the main requirements of the task without unnecessary information.

task achievement

The letter includes all required components: the gift (bed linen), why it was chosen, and how it will be delivered.

task achievement

The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

coherence cohesion

The letter uses appropriate greetings and a closing paragraph.

3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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Write a letter to a friend who just moved into a new house that you are sending a gift to. Include: 1) What the gift is 2) Why you chose it 3) How it will be delivered. Write at least 150 words .

Most people do not care about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that people should be required to retire from their careers at a certain age. Others believe that people should be allowed to work as long as they like. Discuss both these views, and give your opinion.

Some believe that all individuals who break the law should be placed in prison as a form of punishment. However, others hold the view that there are more effective alternatives to deal with lawbreakers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.