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A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. 2. describe the public transport in your city. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there.

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Dear Annie, I hope you're doing well . I was over the moon when I heard that you are moving to Vancouver next month. Well! Before you move , I have some suggestions which would help you to live here . Well! There are lots of interesting places in Vancouver City and I'm really excited to see you around here. As I know , you're a foodie like me so we've great Italian restaurants , and ice cream shops as well and we both love South Indian food. Apart from food, we have great places to visit like an art gallery, aquatic centre and beautiful lakes. You
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 do not need to worry about public transport at all in
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 city because everything is nearby like grocery stores and coffee shops . I believe you're living in the centre of downtown because your job states that and their transport services are convenient ,each bus comes after 5 minutes and everything is available within walking distance. You can meet new people here in so many ways . You can visit bar shops at night and go on tourist buses with a group of people which would help you to be more comfortable with local people.
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 at the workplace . I'm really excited to come and meet you after a long time . Lots of coffee dates in the future . Best wishes, Roopkamal kaur.
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suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. For example, avoid informal exclamations like 'Well!' or repetitive phrases.
logical structure
Consider breaking lengthy sentences into shorter, clearer statements to improve readability.
complete response
The letter covers all points required by the prompt: suggesting an interesting part of the city, describing public transport, and advising on how to meet new people.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, appropriate for writing to a friend.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph is dedicated to addressing a specific part of the prompt, maintaining clarity and structure.
complete response
Provides practical and helpful suggestions, like visiting bar shops and going on tourist buses to meet new people.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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