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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear John, I hope you're doing great. I felt pleased to know that you are curious to learn more about my nation. There are a couple of major events going on. Some are related to religious stories and others are directly connected to international competition. One of the exciting events
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 celebrated nowadays in India is Diwali and it is celebrated all over India. Adults are excited to blow crackers and young children are eager to eat desserts. It is a function of prosperity and happiness. People celebrate it with their family members, relatives and neighbours. They clean their house
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blow candles and lanterns at night and worship the true God.
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, it is personally related to every individual in India. Because Lord Ram won a battle with the devil and returned home safely. It
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 imprints marks on everyone that trust always wins no matter how powerful a lie is. I can't wait to see you and tell you more about
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 amazing stories. Best Wishes, Harpreet

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logical structure
Try to provide a clearer structure by separating distinct points into different paragraphs. This will enhance readability and coherence.
complete response
Expand a little more on why Diwali is significant to people personally, giving a few more specific examples or details.
greeting and closing
Greeting and closing are warm and appropriate, establishing a friendly tone.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is very suitable for a letter to a friend, keeping it engaging and personal.
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