You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear John, I hope you're doing great. I felt pleased to know that you are curious to learn more about my nation. There are a couple of major events going on. Some are related to religious stories and others are directly connected to international competition. One of the exciting events

that is

celebrated nowadays in India is Diwali and it is celebrated all over India. Adults are excited to blow crackers and young children are eager to eat desserts. It is a function of prosperity and happiness. People celebrate it with their family members, relatives and neighbours. They clean their house

and

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blow candles and lanterns at night and worship the true God.

Moreover

, it is personally related to every individual in India. Because Lord Ram won a battle with the devil and returned home safely. It

also

imprints marks on everyone that trust always wins no matter how powerful a lie is. I can't wait to see you and tell you more about

such

amazing stories. Best Wishes, Harpreet

Submitted by harpreet291kaur on Thu Aug 29 2024

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logical structure

Try to provide a clearer structure by separating distinct points into different paragraphs. This will enhance readability and coherence.

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Expand a little more on why Diwali is significant to people personally, giving a few more specific examples or details.

greeting and closing

Greeting and closing are warm and appropriate, establishing a friendly tone.

suitable writing tone

The writing tone is very suitable for a letter to a friend, keeping it engaging and personal.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

170 words

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