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The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced. write 150 words of this process chart.

The diagram below shows how orange juice is produced. write 150 words of this process chart.
#juice #process
The chart illustrates the production of orange
juice
 and sold to the supermarket.
Overall
, it can be seen from the process diagram of orange
juice
 collected fresh
oranges
 and sold to the shops after
undergone
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 different processes. It is conspicuous that
firstly
 the
fress
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fresh
oranges
 were transported to the factory before
oranges
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the oranges
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extracted
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were extracted
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 these
washed
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were washed
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 with fresh water to remove dust particles.
Secondly
, the
extrected
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extracted
juice
 send for packaging and transported to the shops.
On the other hand
, the waste of
oranges
such
 as seeds and skin sent for consumption to live stocks.
In addition
, the fresh
juice
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is send
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send
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 by the refrigerator trucks for
further
 evaporation of water so it converts to the
concentrate
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juice
.
Nextly
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Next
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, the concentrated
juice
filled
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is filled
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 into the big cans and again it
send
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is sent
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 to the warehouse for storage.
Moreover
, the
jucie
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juice
 contained
into
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in
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 cans
mixed
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is mixed
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 with water in the factory so it can be ready for packaging after that process the bottles
send
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are sent
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 to the supermarket for consumers.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words juice, oranges with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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